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Eon Saverem
#1
Hello! this is my first time every joining a forum and I'm pretty excited to get started. This type of formatting and posting is new to me. I'm hoping I pick up on it fast!


Character name: Eon (Heaven’s Last Angel) Saverem

Character source: Own Creation via Trigun Universe

Character history: The Plant had been cracked by Hoppered the Gauntlet’s attack, it seemed as though it could explode at any moment. Vash pressed his hands against the glass, he spoke to it. The power pulsating from the Plant seemed critical, but as he talked his words seemed to sooth the rampant power fluxes bringing them to a stable level. Vash smiled and, for a moment, believed a face within the Plant smiled back, then a final cry of defiance hailed from the Gung-Ho Gun as he launched himself at the Plant breaking through the glass and causing it to detonate! (Unbeknownst to Vash the 2nd Plant on the ship had also been destroyed simultaneously by Grey the Nine Lives) The Ship in which the Plant was powering, plummeted towards the ground losing power and the ability to sustain flight.

The nightmare came to an end as Vash and his companions salvaged what was left of the ordeal, and with an optimistic gaze towards the future the survivors decided to start a new life on the surface. Vash and the others headed their separate way and those left behind began burying their deceased and started repairs on the Plants. Regrettably, The Plant destroyed by Grey the Nine Lives could not be repaired. Although the Plant thought to be destroyed by Hoppered the Gauntlet’s final attack, somehow, was able to continue to output a small reserve of power to the ship.

There was a large portion of the Plant’s glass casing missing, yet a faint glow remained. When the Old Doctor approached the Plant he noticed the glow coming from the hole, reaching out his hand he was shocked to feel a soft film like barrier! He moved closer to inspect the Plant and as he peered inside what he saw he almost couldn’t comprehend. Had he seen an infant? He kept what he saw to himself and explained to the rest of the crew that he could finish repairs here and for them to focus their efforts elsewhere. Alone he watched what he could only describe as a miracle, as the plant gave birth to a baby boy within only a couple of hours. He took the child in his arms, it crying out, and he realized that what had happened there on his own ship was the same miracle that had happened on their forefathers’ ship over a century ago. It was then that he decided to name the boy Eon… Eon Saverem, Heaven’s Last Angel.

Only a year later and the child resembled a boy of at least 10 years of age. It was impossible to keep his growth a secret from the others or the boy himself. The Old Doctor explained to the crew members, what were now the residents of a small town, what Eon was and what a blessing he was. When it came time to tell Eon, he told him as much as he could to the best of his knowledge.

Eon was treated as one of their own, they loved him and he loved them. He enjoyed his life with the town people, though something always plagued his mind. A vision? Or was it an Illusion? Or could it be a memory… of a man, with blonde and kind eyes. Who was it? Eon needed to find out. After only two years living in the town, Eon, who appeared to be in his 20s, explained to everyone he was leaving to find the man from his memory.

Eon was not completely prepared for the world outside his home town. The ones that raised him were kind and caring people, and the ones he more frequently ran into on his journey were far from that. Cruelty, greed and hatred surrounded him and began to alter his perception of the world he had thought it to be. He learned quick how to defend himself, the ways of a gunslinger. Never taking a life though, he had been taught no one had the right to take a life. So whenever a fight did break out, the first opportunity he had to escape he took. This search continued for nearly two years, until one day while in a bar of a small town he came across a wanted poster. It nearly made his heart stop… it was the man from his memory,
Vash the Stampede The Humanoid Typhoon:
REWARD
$$60,000,000,000
DEAD/ALIVE

Excitement was quickly replaced by disbelief which was replaced by sadness which slowly burned into anger. How could the memory of this man bring comfort and soothing to his mind when in reality he was a criminal… worse! He was a murderous monster considered a natural disaster. He didn’t want to believe it, then a couple of goons walked up to him while he held the wanted poster with tears swelling up in his eyes. The men laughed at him said he was baby with no chance of taking down the Humanoid Typhoon and a person as weak as him should just be put out of his misery. One of the men drew his gun and placed it against Eon’s forehead, as a gun shot went off. The tears were gone and rage filled Eon’s eyes. As the men all stared at their associate as hole appeared in the middle of his forehead. Before the men could even reach for their weapons, Eon grabbed the gun that had been pressed against his head from the lifeless hand of the man Eon had shot dead, and before his body could even fall he unloaded without mercy on them. They were evil scum and if the good were to survive he’d be the one to deal with the evil that threatened them, all of the evil including the Humanoid Typhoon.

Whilst on his search for the Humanoid Typhoon he encountered a man of monstrous proportions, muscles on top of muscles, named Moné Galen. Moné upon first meeting him nearly had a heart attack it seemed, he told Eon that he scarcely resembled two of the most terrifying men he had ever known. After some time spent with Moné, he learned his true identity was Monev the Gale a former Gung-Ho Gun presumed to be dead but lived and was in hiding. He told Eon the story of his battle with Vash the Stampede and how he had the eyes of the “Diablo”. He then told him about the man he worked for… Knives Millions, who he believed to be even stronger than Vash. Monev trained Eon for nearly a year to help prepare him best he could for the battle ahead and told him if he wished to have any chance of defeating The Humanoid Typhoon he would have to find Knives, and with that Eon left.

Time passed and all traces of Vash and Knives seemed to have vanished, until one fateful day he ran into two women who ran their own insurance company in a small town that had become well known for a natural well they had dug. The woman almost had the same reaction to his appearance as his teacher Monev. He asked if they knew Vash or Knives and the girls told him that nearly seven years ago a fight for the fate of the world took place a few miles out of town at an oasis, which only a few knew about. Eon had to go, it felt like he was being called to it. He thanked the women and headed for the oasis, his teacher and those girls… those were the kind of people he was going to fight for… to protect.

He had finally reached his destination. It was beautiful; he had never seen such a color green before. He had thought the whole world was nothing but a sand pit but there was beauty in this world after all. He felt something… something, calling to him. He scanned the area and a shine of metal caught his eye. He reached down and dug at the dirt to find a strange revolver, AGL Arms .45 Colt Long, and then he felt an echo as he reached down to find a nearly identical black one. It seemed strange but he felt as though these guns could speak to him, all at once a surge of images rushed through his mind. He saw Vash, and someone else… was that Knives? They were holding these guns and then a spark and a transformation, their bodies becoming one with the weapons into even more powerful weapons! These weapons, in some way he knew they were like him, like Vash, and like Knives. With these he would find them both. As he holstered his new brethren and began to walk away he caught his foot on the edge of something and stumbled. It was big, nearly as big as he was! After clearing more debris away, he uncovered yet another weapon but this one was in the shape of a cross. Though this did not call out to him in the way the other two did he felt as though it was trying to tell him he needed it? Strapping it to his back, he set off with his 3 new tools.

With both of his brethren guiding him he sought out Vash and Knives, drawn to them as a Proton is drawn to an Electron. Hundreds and hundreds of miles into the desert, closer and closer until he saw what looked like a similar ship as the one from his hometown. When he reached it he was met by a figure walking out from inside the ship. Was it Vash? His hands hovered over his pistols. It wasn’t his memory, it wasn’t the wanted poster. “Knives!” Eon yelled out smiling, though the look on Knives’ face was not a pleasant one. “What are you and where did you get those…” Knives glared at Eon. “I’ve come to ask for your help, my name is Eon Saverem. I was trained by Monev the Gale and I’m here to kill The Humanoid Typhoon and destroy all evil from this world.” Eon reached out his hand with excitement across his face. Knives looked down at the ground looking up, eyes closed, and a smile on his face, “Is that so! Well how about that.” Before Eon could take another breath, the smile on Knives face turned to pure hatred as he snapped his fingers causing a small tear in space and time to open behind Eon, a black hole. Pulled in, darkness absorbed him, “Hey Knives, who’s here!?” a voice cried out, “No one….” Knives replied as the darkness swallowed Eon Saverem…
That Darkness became Light, or was it void of anything. A figure stood before him, faceless, he couldn’t speak and as he tried to find the words he sought… a smile grew across the faceless being…

Physical Description: Eon in human age is 7, appears to be mid 20s, stands at 6’ 2”, 170 lbs. Short Blonde Spiked hair, Blue eyes, Athletic Build. He wears Black leather pants, White boots, and Black sleeveless shirt with a white and red overcoat (Lots of Buttons and Buckles and Straps of course).



Stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 1
SPD: 3
TEC: 4

Starting Proficiencies: 1600 OM
Ranged Proficiency (1000), Area Attack Proficiency (600)

Starting Powers:


Starting Moves: 900 OM

AGL Arms .45 Long Colt (Ranged Prof.) (300) - It possesses a 6 o' clock position barrel similar to a Mateba Autorevolver, and a break-top mechanism similar to a Schofield Model 3. The chamber is grooved holds 6 rounds, and has an auto ejector. Rate of fire is about one bullet per second. It is powerful but difficult to aim at long distances. The gun has a black finish color. Lastly it contains a ‘plant module’ hidden above the barrel.

AGL Arms .45 Long Colt (Ranged Prof.) (300) - It possesses a 6 o' clock position barrel similar to a Mateba Autorevolver, and a break-top mechanism similar to a Schofield Model 3. The chamber is smooth and holds 6 rounds, and has an auto ejector. Rate of fire is about one bullet per second. It is powerful but difficult to aim at long distances. This gun has a Nickle Silver finish color. Lastly it contains a ‘plant module’ hidden above the barrel.

Bullet Barrage (Requires Ranged Proficiency, Technique of 4) (600) – Eon plants both his feet shoulder width apart and hovers his hands over his pistols for a second, Western showdown style. He studies his opponents movements for 5 to 10 seconds. 5 seconds being the minimum and 10 the maximum, in this time the accuracy of his shots increases based on the amount of time used studying.The higher the accuracy the more powerful the shots are. He then draws both Pistols and fires a barrage of 12 bullets at his opponent, cannot move from his position, focusing solely on hitting his target rather than his own defense. The barrage lasts 6 seconds, after which he must use his evasiveness to retreat to cover in order to reload.

Super Moves: 600
Angel Arm Stage 1 (Requirements Ranged Proficiency, Area Attack Proficiency, AGL Arms .45 Long Colt) (600) – The gun starts to spark with electricity, then the ‘Plant Module’ hidden above the barrel is exposed as the gun begins fusing with his hand and morphing into another weapon altogether. Process takes about 5 seconds to complete morphosis. Then Eon can take aim and fire a ten foot wide column beam of concentrated energy.


Starting Upgrades: (1000 OM)
1st Stat Increase: TEC (1000)

4400 OM Spent!
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Where did you find us? You were in the Top 10 Online RPG Google search and I liked the sound of your World.
PvP: Green
You can attack me, doesn't mean I won't High Tail It! HA!
#2
Hi there! Welcome to the Omniverse!

Your application is very solid. History is good most of your moves are good. I'm assuming the two pistol moves are for two separate pistols? In that case you could easily combine them into one move where he uses both of his pistols. If you would like the option to switch out between one and two pistols then it would be separate costs.

Bullet Barrage- It seems as if you could already do this since your guns fire 1 bullet per second. Maybe if you want to add a charge time or anything else this could warrant a move being more powerful. As it is, you could already do this with your previous moves.

Other than that, your application is good.
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#3
Thank you for the advice! I get nervous about making "OP" moves and really like the fairness and balance of this RPG. I edited the Bullet Barrage with Italics. As for the Pistols they are 2 separate weapons, that I can interchange between 1 and duel wielding. This would make them both 300 OM correct?
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You can attack me, doesn't mean I won't High Tail It! HA!
#4
The difference of charge time will add up the move to 600 OM is that okay? Other than that you're good and i'll get you approved. (Also I feel like with that 5 to 10 seconds you could also add in something about quicker shooting time or maybe more powerful shots but that's just me)
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#5
I really appreciate your help and advice. I added one more edit 'underlined'. I also adjusted the cost as you had explained. For my full understanding this is because the move can be shot, or charged for greater effect, Hence making it 2 types of uses correct?
PvP: Green
You can attack me, doesn't mean I won't High Tail It! HA!
#6
The 600 is for the variability from 5 seconds charge time through 10 seconds charge time. anyways
Approved


Name: Eon Saverem
Level: 1
Spent OM:4400
Proficiencies(1600):Ranged Proficiency (1000), Area Attack Proficiency (600)
Powers():
Moves(1200): AGL Arms .45 Long Colt(600), Bullet Barrage(600)
Super Moves(600): Angel Arm Stage 1(600)
Transformations:
Assists:
Items:
Bases:
Unlocks(1000): 1st Stat Upgrade-TEc
Base stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 1
SPD: 3
TEC: 4

Make a roster in the Roster Forum, copy and paste the above and make that the first post of your roster. The second reply should contain all the core information of your character(Look at the profile of an active member to see what I'm talking about)

Here's a topic to help you along: What to Do Once You've Been Approved

Remember that your first post should be in the Nexus after you've been taken by Omni, and all future purchases should go in a log that I shall set up shorty.

You're good to go! Enjoy the Omniverse!
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#7
Thank you for all your help, advice and quick response time. I won't forget it!
PvP: Green
You can attack me, doesn't mean I won't High Tail It! HA!


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