Number XI Marluxia the Graceful Assassin

[Miranda Frost]

Character name: Marluxia

Character source: Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories

Character history: I am using Marluxia right before his assignment to Castle Oblivion

Physical Description:


Stats:
ATK:3
DEF:2
SPD:3
TEC:2

Starting Proficiencies: Physical Strength (1000), Range Proficiency(1000), Area Attack Proficiency (600)

Starting Powers:

Starting Moves:

Graceful Dahlia: (300) Marluxia's signature Weapon, a long pink scythe. With it he can perform simple slashes and hacks. Attacks are generally more predictable than normal, smaller weaponry, but makes up for it with high cutting power.

Energy Wave: (600) Marluxia charges his energy into the blade of his scythe for five to ten seconds, causing it to glow a bright pink color. Marluxia swings his scythe, releasing a crescent shaped energy wave (as wide as his scythe blade). Blocking the attack causes it to disperse in front of the opponent, scattering a dense cloud of flower petals to obstruct the opponent's view, allowing Marluxia to close in for a follow up attack, and/or attempt to flee. To charge, Marluxia must be stationary, and must charge to at least five seconds before firing. For a more powerful wave, Marluxia can charge to ten seconds, however it will leave him vulnerable to attack. At the moment, Marluxia has to concentrate hard to gather the energy for this attack. A movement to dodge, parry, or block an attack will cause him to lose all gathered energy.

Blossum Gust: (300) Marluxia sends out a gust of wind, forming a small whirlwind (about ten feet in diameter and lasting five seconds.) around an opponent bringing along a hundred or so energy charged rose petals. These petals are extremely sharp due to the energy they contain. If the opponent is within or near the whirlwind, they can expect to have these sharp rose petals thrown their way. At the moment the move is too weak to bind its victim inside its vortex and can only perform the laceration part of this technique. (I will edit this later when I get the right proficiency)

Tremor: (300) Marluxia charges his scythe and slams the butt of it against the ground, causing it to shake within 25 feet of where he stands, possibly knocking those within that diameter off their feet.
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[Omni]

Hi there! Just a few things:

Graceful Dahlia looks fine.

Energy Wave is priced as a variable move (600), and it appears to be, but it doesn't explicitly say how. You should add to the description how powerful the wave is (I assume it is stronger at 10 than at 5 seconds).

Blossum Gust, again, is priced at variable but doesn't mention how it is variable in the description. Can additional energy be put into the attack, fatiguring Marluxia quicker but increasing its attack strength? This needs to be explicit in the description.

Tremor: Same as above.

Everything else looks fine. If you need any help I'll be around.

[Miranda Frost]

Edited

[Omni]

That's brilliant, everything looks good to go. Thank you and welcome! It's dangerous to go alone: take this roster. Copy and paste it to a new topic entitled 'Marluxia' and add a reply with your moves and any other details you wish to add. Everything else is detailed here. Enjoy your stay.

Name: Marluxia
Level: 1
Spent OM: 4100
Proficiencies: (2600); Physical Strength (1000), Ranged (1000), Area Attack (600)
Powers:
Moves: (1500); Graceful Dahlia (300), Energy Wave (600), Blossom Gust (300), Tremor (300)
Super Moves:
Transformations:
Summons:
Items:
Bases:
Unlocks:
Base stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 2
SPD: 3
TEC: 2