Depiction Feedback

[Carmelita]

I'm a little nervous at how I've been depicting the NPCs and the established places of the world in my posts. If anyone has any feedback they'd like to give, I'd be grateful!

[Jade Harley]

I think you're doing just great! Your description of the different locations your character visits are pretty solid and pleasantly refreshing usually. NPC interactions are also just fine as you've written them, maybe a little abrupt at times (conversations ending a bit too quickly can be confusing, though that's just my opinion), but otherwise they have a good, natural flow and fit into your story well. Your Dunes posts are simply excellent, I love your take on the setting and inhabitants!

[Carmelita]

Thank you! I've been very nervous of treading too heavily on established canon by accident, but it's good to hear I've not murdered the delivery.