Nippur Verse Info Update

[Sasuke Uchiha]

New Babylon would like to submit for a change to our verse info so it more accurately reflects the current state of Nippur. Please and thank you! ^_^

From this: 

A town founded by King Gilgamesh and his loyal followers.  Nippur grew quickly after its founding and attracted settlers from the more remote parts of the Dunes seeking refuge beneath the leadership of a man deemed a 'controversial' individual due to his penchant for violence and strong-armed responses to opposition.  Nippur resembles an ancient Middle Eastern town, with sandstone walls, temples, and other various structures.  Like many locations in the Omniverse, its culture is not homogenous, and there are plenty of more 'modern' structures, utilities, and services.

A monarchy led by a charismatic man with a deeply developed cult of personality, Nippur was thrown into permanent disarray when it suffered a string of attacks.  Two solitary acts of violence against Nippur was followed by a full-scale assault by a force of primes under the loose leadership of Sinestro, the Deputy of the Town with No Name.  Breaching the walls of the city, the primes besieged the streets of the city.  Various skirmishes broke out throughout Nippur's districts.  The Siege of Nippur was not as lop-sided as many journalists and historians account, but during the battle, King Gilgamesh was defeaten and banished.  Without their leader and with many of his lieutenants abroad, the city fell into chaos.

With no one to fill the power vacuum, Nippur's people fractured as some clung to the old regime and others sought something new.  Alongside this internal strife, the city also became the target of various raids from nomadic warlords and psychopaths. The Golden Cross, an organization set up by several inter-verse companies, has sought to provide the city with humanitarian aid, although successes are limited due to the Dunes' chaotic nature.  






To this: (Changes in bold)

Half a day's journey from the Ashen Steppes gate, three hours from Carrefore, four hours from the Coruscant gate, and just a four to six hour walk northwest from the Nexus gate, (a few hours past Town With No Name) you will find the kingdom of New Babylon: Nippur. Formerly a mining settlement abandoned by the empire, the town was founded by King Gilgamesh and his loyal followers. Nippur grew quickly after its founding and attracted settlers from the more remote parts of the Dunes seeking refuge beneath the leadership of a man deemed a 'controversial' individual due to his penchant for violence and strong-armed responses to opposition. Nippur resembles an ancient Middle Eastern town, with sandstone walls, temples, and other various structures. Like many locations in the Omniverse, its culture is not homogenous, and there are plenty of more 'modern' structures, utilities, and services.

 A monarchy led by a charismatic man with a deeply developed cult of personality, Nippur was thrown into permanent disarray when it suffered a string of attacks. Two solitary acts of violence against Nippur was followed by a full-scale assault by a force of primes under the loose leadership of Sinestro, the Deputy of the Town with No Name. Breaching the walls of the city, the primes besieged the streets of the city. Various skirmishes broke out throughout Nippur's districts. The Siege of Nippur was not as lop-sided as many journalists and historians account, but during the battle, King Gilgamesh was defeated and banished. Without their leader and with many of his lieutenants abroad, the city fell into chaos.
 
 With no one to fill the power vacuum, Nippur's people fractured as some clung to the old regime and others sought something new. Alongside this internal strife, the city also became the target of various raids from nomadic warlords and psychopaths, namely the Deathchew Clan, led by Baron Deathchew.

The Golden Cross, an organization set up by several inter-verse companies, has sought to provide the city with humanitarian aid and although successes were originally limited due to the Dunes' chaotic nature, with Gilgamesh’s recent return, they have become a big help to the citizens of Nippur. Enabled by Gilgamesh’s building of Nippur’s first hospital, Golden Cross Hospital, named to honor the organization, morale within the city has begun to increase for the first time in years. In fact, with Gilgamesh's return to the city, comes proclamations of a rebirth to grandeur, a set of new laws to uphold, and an ensemble of primes tasked to enacting the betterment of Nippur's state. More can be found about New Babylon here.

[Trixie]

Done.

[Alex]

On a train right now but I need to overrule the distances you state. The settlements you mention aren't within walking distance of one another. You are vastly over cramping. There are probably a few days between TWNN and Carrefore/the Nexus gate (hence the train between the two) or at least several several hours via vehicle, for instance. You can have Nippur be Ambrosia-close to the gate if you would like, but you'll have to take out the mention of the other settlements.

[Gilgamesh]

Would this work better?


Once entering throug h either of the Gates, anyone who desires to travel to the broken city must undertake a half a day's journey via vehicle or many days of walking. The city seems to be another half-day's journey from that of the Town With No Name. Nippur grew quickly after its founding and attracted settlers from the more remote parts of the Dunes seeking refuge beneath the leadership of a man deemed a 'controversial' individual due to his penchant for violence and strong-armed responses to opposition. Nippur resembles an ancient Middle Eastern town, with sandstone walls, temples, and other various structures. Like many locations in the Omniverse, its culture is not homogenous, and there are plenty of more 'modern' structures, utilities, and services.

[Alex]

*thumbs up*