Switching Characters - Sackboy to Shrek

[Asriel Dreemurr]

Character name: Shrek

Character source: Shrek

Character history: Go here for the first film: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek. Second film: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek_2. Third one: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek_the_Third. Final film: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek_Forever_After.

Appearance: [spoiler][/spoiler]

Stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 3
SPD: 1
TEC: 2

Starting Proficiencies: Physical Strength (1000), Ranged Proficiency (1000)

Starting Powers: None

Starting Moves: Roar (0), Match (900)

Roar (0) (Fodder)

Shrek lets out an enormous roar for intimidation purposes. It is 90 decibels loud.

Match (900) (Requires Ranged Proficiency)

The first use is one of an average match, being lit by rubbing against any non-flammable surface. The second use is the ability to launch fireballs. When Shrek burps for a short time while facing the match, a weak fireball races out. The diameter of this ball is 5 inches. Since he can control his burps, he can keep on launching fireballs as long as necessary. The third use is to launch a stream of fire. Shrek charges up his burp and releases a stream of fire from the match. Its maximum length is 10 feet. Both fire attacks last for 5 seconds.

I confirm that I have read and agreed to the Rules of Conduct

[Asriel Dreemurr]

Bump.

[Guu]

A few things:

While you can link to the wiki, you still need to be more specific of which point in the history your character has been taken by Omni.


Match:

The first use is purely fodder and doesn't cost anything.

The fireballs you'll need to specify the rate of fire. How often does it shoot fireballs in that 5 seconds?

Also, I need the width of the third use in measurements. You've specified the range, but not the width and height of the stream. If it's a cone, make sure to specify that too. Remember, anything wider than 3 feet requires Area Attack Proficiency.

[Asriel Dreemurr]

Character name: Shrek

Character source: Shrek

Character history: Go here for the first film: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek. Second film: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek_2. Third one: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek_the_Third. Final film: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shrek_Forever_After. Shrek was kidnapped a few months after Forever After. Shrek and his family spent the next few months leading an average life, that is until Shrek was taken by Omni.

Appearance: [spoiler][/spoiler]

Stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 3
SPD: 1
TEC: 2

Starting Proficiencies: Physical Strength (1000), Ranged Proficiency (1000)

Starting Powers: None

Starting Moves: Roar (0), Match (300)

Roar (0) (Fodder)

Shrek lets out an enormous roar for intimidation purposes. It is 90 decibels loud.

Match (300) (Requires Ranged Proficiency)

The first use is one of an average match, being lit by rubbing against any non-flammable surface. The second use is to launch a stream of fire. Shrek burps and releases a stream of fire from the match. Its maximum length is 10 feet and it lasts for 5 seconds. The match does not burn out and is only able to be put out by outside sources. If it is stolen or put out, Shrek summons a new one.

The stream's width is 6 inches. The height is 3 inches.

I confirm that I have read and agreed to the Rules of Conduct

[Guu]

Hmmmm... the move is good, though I've spotted a typo. "Both fire attacks last for 5 seconds." Reword that as it's only one fire attack now. Also, it still says Match is 900 Om in other parts of the document. Both should be easy fixes though.

History is a tad vague. Please at least add one sentence that insinuates what happened in those few months of off screen time, like for example: "Shrek would spend the next few months leading a relatively uneventful life with his family, that is until he was taken by Omni."

Make those changes, and you'd be all set to go!

[Asriel Dreemurr]

Taking ogre.

[Guu]

And approved!

Name: Shrek
Level: 1
Spent OM: 2300
Proficiencies (2000): Physical Strength (1000), Ranged Proficiency (1000)
Powers:
Moves (300): Match (300)
Super Moves:
Transformations:
Assists:
Items:
Bases:
Unlocks:
Base stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 3
SPD: 1
TEC: 2

Just make yourself a new Roster for Shrek! You're log is right here: <!-- l --><a class="postlink-local" href="http://omniverse-rpg.com/viewtopic.php?f=34&t=3953&p=60534#p60534">viewtopic.php?f=34&t=3953&p=60534#p60534</a><!-- l -->

[Asriel Dreemurr]

Won't provide a writing example. Changed my mind.

[Guu]

Ok, it was brought to my intention that you only have 9 stat points spent instead of 10. If you could please present me with an updated stat block so I could fix the log record, i'd appreciate it.

[Asriel Dreemurr]

Here's an updated Stat block.
ATK: 3
DEF: 3
SPD: 1
TEC: 3

[Guu]

Alright! Everything up to date! Sorry again for the inconvenience!