Roster Advice

[Handsome Jack]

I'm give people general tips on improving their roster here. Just ask and I'll EVENTUALLY get to you. Whether you want tips on prettying it up, or just ideas on how to make it easier to peruse, I'll do what I can to help. Unless I get overwhelmed, then you might be waiting for awhile. I will also only critique the roster of the character you posted here with.

General tips from what I've seen thus far

1. Click "remove signature" at the bottom of your posts. A bulky roster is a roster no one wants to scroll through. 
   
2. Use Spoiler tags for lengthy descriptions and images, again to cut down bulk.
   
3. Split dissimilar items into different posts.
   
4. Include a Quick Jump menu on your first page, for ease of navigation.
   
5. Detailed descriptions are good, but try to use colors, bolding, underlining, or some other method to give out a "cliffnotes" on bulky descriptions by making the important parts "pop".
   
6. Look through the Roster on the site. This is a Grade-A tip. It lets you see things you like and things you don't like. A lot of my roster was built from things I enjoyed from Sasuke's, Luffy's, and Tearen's Rosters.
   

Illidan: 

First page: drop the signature at the end, but it's concise and to the point. Nothing special, but not bad. I would include a "quick jump" menu at the bottom, to let users jump to the page they wanna read.

2nd page: put the quote below the picture for greater effect.Include an "apparent age", since Illidan doesn't look like a man who's 15k years old.Height and weight should use the same measurement scale. Going from Imperial to Metric is weird. No need for an "alignment," just describe how Illidan acts in your Personality section. It's hard to notice your video links, since they're merely bolded. I'd either embed them, or (preferably) use a color to differentiate them from the rest of the text. I would have put your NPCs on their own page, rather than cramming them onto the Personality one. Lastly, I'd include a short written blurb about Illy's appearance too, just to cement what the picture says.

3rd page: I'd put your Move Descriptions into Spoilers. I'd also separate your Power-Ups and Items into different posts. Short posts are less bothersome to scroll through.

4th page: this is where I would have put your NPCs. And, like your other pages, remove the signature to cut down on bulk.

Overall: Just cut down on the bulk, man. Use Spoiler Tags and separate your things into more Posts. Add a Quick Jump menu to let viewers jump to the page they're looking for, and your Roster will be much improved. All that said, you have lots of awesome detail in your roster. Pretty much any situation you run into, you have an example on the roster as to how Illidan will act within it. Solid work.

[Clownpiece]

R8 my shitty roster(s) please .__.

[Handsome Jack]

Clownpiece

1st page: Basic, but up to date. So that's good. Remove the signature and add a Quick Jump menu for maximum effect.

2nd page: History is enormous. Consider using colors to make a "cliff notes" version, for people who don't have 3 hours to read the thing. The picture of CP is small enough you could float it to the left and not have to hide it in a spoiler. Appearance description could use some of the above, in colored cliffnotes. I'm just gonna say "cliffnotes" for this whole page. Additionally, remove signature and maybe add a video or image link (or a few) to help readers visualize CP's personality.

3rd page: I DO enjoy me some Stat explanations. Good work. Why is Lampad's torch the only Move not in Spoilers? Seems weird. Maybe add a picture to help readers visualize it too. Cliffnotes will go a long way again, since you're a very "description-heavy" rosterer. Spacing between the Moves is irregular. Super Moves are, weirdly, not in Spoilers. Signature.

4th page: I like this page. Could use some cliffnotes, but the visual aids for the Base are nice. Also, signature.

Overall: Just needs a spring cleaning, for the most part. And cliffnotes. Cuz everything you had on here was at least, like, 300 words. When someone is writing a fight, or even just a post, they might not wanna spend 20 minutes digging through your descriptions for the info they need. But your roster has good bone structure and over-all it wasn't a HARD roster to go through. You might also benefit from adding a section on what CP has been up to since joining the OV. Enemies or friends she may have made. Adventures had. Etc. Even just posting links to your old threads can help someone get a feel for your character.

[Zack Fair]

Why not? I've always been satisfied with my rosters, and haven't messed with the format since day one. Minus broken images I'll eventually get around to fixing and minor updates, I'm up for critique. Zack, Matrix, and Zedd all follow the same basic format, so any one of them.

[Jak Mar]

Rate Jaks roster please?

[Handsome Jack]

Zack Fair

1st page: nice color work, though I'd probably have made Consumed OM red instead of Spent OM. Could use a Quick Guide, but otherwise solid.

2nd page: approximately how tall is Zack? Your description could use some fleshing out, but it's short and concise so this way you don't need cliffnotes. I got no critique for the rest.

3rd page: Nice use of links to send people to the approval post for the Move. The altered size on the prices is also pleasing. I kind of wish it had some pictures to go along with everything though. Otherwise, solid.

4th page: This is a solid NPC page that everyone should look at as an example. No complaints. The rest of the page is solid too.

5th page: You might benefit from adding a summary of the threads after each one, but otherwise this is another good page.

6th page: Nice list of tips.

7th page: So many broken links... and Acheivement pages are outdated now. But hey, you do you.

Overall: Why did you need me to critique this again? All you really need is some prettying up and you'll have a perfect roster

[Handsome Jack]

Jak Mar

1st page: I like the color coded stats for your forms. I kinda wish you'd included the T2 into it as well, since it looks so nice. Remove the signature to reduce bulk. Quick Guide. Otherwise, it's fine.

2nd page: Did you mean to use different blues here? It made me think they were links, for a second. It looks like you copy-pasted from a Jak wiki. This is fine, but you need to proofread them to remove links and I suggest removing formatting when you post it, since I could see some slightly darker lettering. Unless you were trying to cliffnotes, in which case I suggest using a starkly different color from the body of the text.You might also want to throw these blurbs into spoilers, since it's so large. The threads portion, again, has weirdly different colors and formatting. But I enjoyed that you have a quick synopsis next to each link. The Personality you pulled from the wiki may not reflect YOUR Jak anymore. I'd suggest redoing it. This post was CRAZY large and hard to navigate. I'd suggest breaking it up into at least 3 posts to make it easier to navigate. Signature.

3rd page: formatting is an issue again here.There's a few instances where you might wanna ask a pal to help you reword a Move to look nicer, but other than those things, it's fine. The descriptions are generally short enough to not need cliffnotes. Signature.

4th page: why did you put more Moves here? They could have been fine on the previous page. Signature.

5th page: N/A

6th page: Broken links and an outdated page. I'd nix it. Signature.

7th page: I wish there was more details to tell me about what kind of relationship Jak and/or Daxter has with these people. Bonus points if you include perspectives from BOTH of them. Signature.

8th page: Basic, but fine. Describe what Storm Demon Handcuffs are and look like. Signature.

9th page: Why did you quote a page you already had and not add anything else? I'd nix this page as well. Signature.

Overall: Whew! That was a big one! Particularly that second post. I'd consider condensing some pages with similar topics, removing the outdated and extra posts, and separating out the super long 2nd post into smaller, bite-sized morsels. Get a friend to help you rewrite some of the Move descriptions to make them read better, and do the same for your History and Personality. It'll take some time and effort, but you'll feel a lot of pride when it's accomplished.

[James Knight]

I would like help to fancy up my rosters for Warren Zimmer, and Rafael Esquivel if possible.

[Ahana Varma]

I've done a bit of work on Ahana's roster after reading your advice here, Jeff, so it'd be cool if you could look over it if you have time, in case I've missed anything obvious...

Okay... anything obvious aside from cliff notes...

I haven't put those in because I don't even know where to begin with them...

[Omni]

This is really good stuff. Next time I change up my rosters I will be taking tips from this >_>

[Handsome Jack]

I haven't forgotten you guys. Been too busy to jump on my laptop. I'll try to critique you guys tomorrow, after work

[Desman Black]

Wait
This is a thing >.>
I accept this challedge