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Character Change: Specter to SARU - SARU - 09-27-2015
Character name: Saryuu 'Simeon' Evan (Alias: SARU)
Character source: Inazuma Eleven Go: Chrono Stone
Character history: He is the former Leader to Feida, a organization of Second Stage Children, individuals that had been deemed as far descendants of the most powerful soccer players that have various psychic powers at the price of their short lives (since they cannot live beyond twenty) due to a genetic mutation, that has waged war against the adults of El Dorado for the future of soccer. After being vaccinated to end the mutation once and for all, his powers were deemed as dormant, however unknown to him, another mutation was happening and it was adapting to this change.
Several months later, his powers and other former attributes (exception of short life since that has been resolved) were returning, however in the mist of this, he simply vanished one day and was never seen again in his reality. Unknown to him, this was actually the work of Omni.
Physical Description: In the incident, he has white spiky hair and wears goggles with a black frame and yellow lens. He wears a sleeveless orange shirt over a full sleeved black shirt with black pants underneath and white boots, along with a small light blue scarf and white gloves. He also has big dark violet eyes, which are similar to Tenma's.
Nowadays, he wears more casual clothes, however he remains to have his small blue scarf around.
Stats:
ATK: 2
DEF: 2
SPD: 3
TEC: 3
Starting Proficiencies: Physical Strength (1000), Ranged (1000), Remote Control (600), Ranged Materialize (600), Area Attack (600) (3800)
Starting Powers: Telekinesis/ Basic (400)
Starting Moves: Static Burst (Area Attack, Ranged, Ranged Materialized) (300)
Inspired from Fei's Air Bullet and his own move, being of Shellbit Burst, it is a small ball of static energy that SARU creates between his hands in a rotating fashion as it grows to the size of a soccerball in a window of four seconds. As he tosses it over and kicks it for added power, it creates speeds going much like a bullet going down a straight trajectory as it cannot be manipulated. The maximum range distance is ten meters before the ball eventually bursts out in a violent shock affecting within five feet of the blast radius for moderate damage.
I confirm that I have read and agreed to the Rules of Conduct.
((The amount of OM I got from the Specter account is 5519.435, I halved it and had 519.435OM))
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - Dark Link - 09-29-2015
Just so you know, you only receive half of your earned OM when switching characters if your total earned OM is 8000 or more. If it's less, then your amount is reset back to the standard 5000.
As for your application, I'm going to need more details regarding your move. What is its range? Since you mention Area Attack Proficiency as a requirement, does that mean that it does area damage? If so, what is its blast radius? Can SARU control its trajectory? Also, is it a simple attack or does it have additional functions/modes?
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - SARU - 09-29-2015
Ah, I understand. Thanks for the clear up there and I'll keep that in mind for future reference.
As to further explain the attack further, it's a simple attack with long range means. Yes, it can affect the area around the other side with a violent burst of it's energy and once the attack has been launched, SARU can't control the trajectory, it's a straight-on shot from there. Wherever he launches from, it's going in that one direction.
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - Dark Link - 09-29-2015
In that case, you don't have to pay 600 OM for it. Also, I'm going to need you to add the move's effective range and blast radius to the move description.
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - SARU - 09-29-2015
Quote:Starting Moves: Static Burst (Area Attack, Ranged, Ranged Materialized) (300)
Inspired from Fei's Air Bullet and his own move, being of Shellbit Burst, it is a simple attack that SARU instantaneously creates a ball of static energy between his hands in a rotating fashion. As he tosses it over and kicks it for added power, it creates speeds going much like a bullet in a long range distance before the ball eventually bursts out in a violent shock, affecting the surrounding area, for moderate damage. The trajectory is from wherever he launches the ball is direct and cannot be manipulated.
Is that good?
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - Dark Link - 09-29-2015
You need to be more specific. When I say that you need to add the move's effective range and blast radius, I mean that you have to provide a specific measurement i.e. from how many meters/yards can SARU fire the ball and how many meters/feet around it does the ball affect when it explodes.
Also, the move is going to need some downsides to balance out the benefits. I mean, it's an instantaneous attack that travels very quickly and does moderate damage; that's quite powerful, especially for a regular move. It's going to require a serious cost to justify.
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - SARU - 09-29-2015
For weaknesses: Well, if he can't focus well (due to a debuff or other means) or if it hits an object in the way (like a wall and such), it falls apart pretty quickly and can dissipate very quickly. Oh and the plane in front of him must be flat-surfaced if it's to perform the best; if the ground is even slightly rocky/bumpy, it's going to have difficulty with travel as it would slow it down somewhat, that's just it.
For Distance: The blast radius on impact would be around the individual only for a few seconds before it dissipates and as for the feet radius, his long shot would, as much as there's no rough estimation of an absolute exact, but it must be longer than ~10 to ~20 feet at best.
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - Dark Link - 10-03-2015
I'm afraid that's not really going to cut it. While you're free to roleplay the move as being weaker in certain areas if you so desire, a move being stronger/weaker due to environmental factors isn't an acceptable way to balance a move. Also, like I said, you're going to need to be more specific when it comes to the move's distance and area of effect.
If you need help with making a better move description and the move examples in the rules aren't helpful enough, I highly recommend using the Move Creation Workshop. Ed/Minato is always eager to help people with their moves.
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - SARU - 10-09-2015
Notice: Static Burst has been updated via Move Creation thread.
Re: Character Change: Specter to SARU - Dark Link - 10-13-2015
Alright, the move looks good now. Your switch is hereby approved!
Name: SARU
Level: 1
Spent OM: 4500
Proficiencies: (3800); Physical Strength (1000), Ranged Proficiency (1000), Remote Control Proficiency (600), Ranged Materialize Proficiency (600), Area Attack Proficiency (600)
Powers: (400); Basic Telekinesis (400)
Moves: (300); Static Burst (300)
Super Moves:
Transformations:
Assists:
Items:
Bases:
Unlocks:
Base stats:
ATK: 2
DEF: 2
SPD: 3
TEC: 3
Your old roster has been archived, your Purchase Log has been updated and I will be resetting your OM shortly. You should know what to do from here, though it wouldn't hurt to read this again to refresh your memory. Have fun!
