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Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-23-2015
Yu Kanda Wrote:YESSSSS advice would be great.... have no clue where i am going wrong. Is it the stories i come up with ? the way i discribe things ? Or just the language barrier and i need to work on my grammer ... TELL MEEEE ^^ would appreciate the writing advice.
YOOU are doing pretty well!
Not sure why everyone thinks they are doing poorly
Alas, to cover a few bases:
You keep worrying about your grammar, but you are BILINGUAL. Don't sweat it. Keep the effort in and the flow will come.
I will say, I personally would love to see more emphasis on what distinguishes your character from the group. *Example* you applied this well when you showed leadership qualities.
Continuing with this, I myself have tried to differ my character from yours as they are similar by eventuating introspection.
Not much else comes to mind, though I suggest reading the above for any additional hints that could be helpful.
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-23-2015
Zack Fair Wrote:I always like to know where I can do better!
Fo' sho'
Personally, you are doing pretty well. And I love writing with you, if I had to suggest anything, just work on how the current situation might impact your character, as well as some things that might cause him to learn, grow, or change.
Some things you have excelled at so far are keeping the audience entertained as well as always participating and making your character important. Keep it up.
Happy writing~
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-23-2015
Ruby Rose Wrote:Glad this thread is here! I've noticed you're being unusually nice to Grave, but I can tell that I'm still not doing as well as I could. I'd love to have any advice on how to make sure Grave stays in good shape and doesn't end up falling into his... grave XDxD nice one.
Well you are doing very well and seem motivated to interact with the characters (bonus) as for advice I could offer I'd like to see some introspection on the character because I think it is interesting and would love to see some cool vampire variables come into play. ^.^
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-23-2015
Gamzee Makara Wrote:I'm kinda with Adam on this one. I feel like I'm not doing a bad job, but it's more of an issue of me doing just an okay job, and I'd like it to you know, be a GREAT JOB DAMN SON YOURE GOING PLACES YOURE A PRODIGY YOURE
Okay maybe not that much but you get the idea. Just basically some things I can work on. Plus, surrounded by so much talent, I sometimes feel intimidated and I'm just like gah what if I'm not up to par.
So basically, could I just get a tad bit of advice?
Coming rict up! *puns*
Like some of the ones before you, it can't hurt to proof read a bit because of your character's speech difference.
I think you are doing a pretty good job so far and I don't think it can hurt to do a little reflection now and again, especially this phase I would like to see some emphasis on how his history aligns with the current zombie outbreak. You've shown this subtly, don't be afraid to break from the norm a bit. As for anything else to say, details and how they impact your character are always good.
Keep up the good work, ^^
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-23-2015
I believe that was everyone interested, but I'll keep this topic open, and will check on occasionally for others interested. Thanks everyone!
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Deadpool - 08-24-2015
*raises hand*
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Ruby Rose - 08-25-2015
Those some vampire variables you were looking for?
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Dark Link - 08-25-2015
I certainly wouldn't mind some feedback. Granted, I'm perfectly aware that all of my posts so far have been rushed and have suffered as a result. Still, another pair of eyes could bring attention to things I might have ignored.
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-25-2015
Ruby Rose Wrote:Those some vampire variables you were looking for?
Excellent.
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Mickey Mouse - 08-25-2015
Throw it on me, Sam.
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-25-2015
What if: everything she says is a hint?
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Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Ruby Rose - 08-25-2015
Gildarts Wrote:What if: everything she says is a hint?
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:mygod: THEY'RE HAVING A COLLABORATIVE DREAM
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-25-2015
Deadpool Wrote:*raises hand*
Hmm, for you I can suggest establishing some character growth, and working on a bit of interaction with Top Man. Make a cool story or memory this phase~
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-25-2015
Dark Link Wrote:I certainly wouldn't mind some feedback. Granted, I'm perfectly aware that all of my posts so far have been rushed and have suffered as a result. Still, another pair of eyes could bring attention to things I might have ignored.
You've been doing well! I don't have much advice to give you, just do your best to keep a story going, as well as maintain interest as competition will get intense this round.
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-25-2015
Mickey Mouse Wrote:Throw it on me, Sam.
Haaaa.
Okay! So, you have thrived with interacting with multiple people, however there IS that last qualifier that prioritizes the "lone" character progress.
I don't doubt you'll do well with integrating plot, however just focus a little extra in how your character has developed and changed because of the story.
Happy writing!
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 08-28-2015
Hint:
The utilization of everything that has happened so far has been magnificent, interesting, and coordinated and I soundly promote it.
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 09-09-2015
This topic is dead, but if your character has survived this part, post here and I'll tell you one of my favorite things about your character and portrayal.
Staring with Richto, if he sees this I just love what your character brings to the table. There's a lot of color, diversity, and he's just intriguing. I also appreciate how much of an individual your character is <3
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Yu Kanda - 09-09-2015
Gildarts Wrote:This topic is dead, but if your character has survived this part, post here and I'll tell you one of my favorite things about your character and portrayal.
Staring with Richto, if he sees this I just love what your character brings to the table. There's a lot of color, diversity, and he's just intriguing. I also appreciate how much of an individual your character is <3
To turn things around a little bit... I love how christa has so many different sides to her. She can be your best friend or your worst enemy and still portray the personality at that point really wel. A strong character ^^ !!!
So... Klaud ? :p
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Gildarts - 09-09-2015
Yu Kanda Wrote:=,D yu that meant so much to meGildarts Wrote:This topic is dead, but if your character has survived this part, post here and I'll tell you one of my favorite things about your character and portrayal.
Staring with Richto, if he sees this I just love what your character brings to the table. There's a lot of color, diversity, and he's just intriguing. I also appreciate how much of an individual your character is <3
To turn things around a little bit... I love how christa has so many different sides to her. She can be your best friend or your worst enemy and still portray the personality at that point really wel. A strong character ^^ !!!
So... Klaud ? :p
Klaud is a bamf, and I love how much morality you bring to her. She isn't just a military soldier, she's a general, and it really shows. I love her personality, and how you've weaved together a story with Jan's character and just how much involvement you've established. Klaud is definitely super cool, and I like reading your posts about her. ^.^
Re: Secondary Saga Hints - Proto Man - 09-09-2015
I dodge bullets when I'm spinning.