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Melk - Melk - 07-07-2018
CHARACTER NAME: Melk
CHARACTER SOURCE: Mon-Musu Quest / Monster Girl Quest
CHARACTER HISTORY: Living in the forest outside of Iliasville Melk led a somewhat boring life, living off of food that humans had thrown away, from their farms or even their stores.
she developed a reputation like many of her "sisters" for being a thief. she sometimes visited midas village, a town where slug girls and humans live together although after some fighting they were forced to move out of the village into the harsh world populated by humans, spending her whole life on ilias (continent) never having a chance to explore the world, something she would love to do.
Because of this she is very fond of her own kind, and finds it hard to trust and like humans, normally blaming them for her problems, she steals from humans with no remorse, normally
killing them if she is found.
Being a slug girl, she is slow, but enjoys the finer things in life, sitting back with some tea, having a nice stroll in the woods, Melk appears harmless most of the times, but can get vile when provoked, most of her time spend strolling through the woods.
One day, melk was traveling through the woods, she was going to get some food, humming to herself, and then randomly blacks out, waking up in a void, omni standing there, due to the humanoid figure, melk believes its part of some sort of attack on her and her "sisters", she was going to lunge at him, but calmed down quickly, not wanting another war after what happened in midas village, listening carefully to what omni had to say, taking it all in... another world? she had only heard about that kinda stuff from books she used to read as a child... things here seem alot more advanced than ilias (continent). as the darkness fades away she stands there... shivering, stuttering a little, as someone who likes to take things slowly, this was too fast for her to comprehend....
PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION:
She wears a brownish dress, underneath that is her membrane and gastropod, her gastropod coming out of the back of her membrane, allowing her to move around, she is very dirty due to the mucus coming out of her membrane. she is around the height of an average human. because of this, she can somewhat blend in, providing her skirt is down and your facing her from the front.
![[Image: Slug-Girl-monster-girl-quest-39767790-500-500.png]](http://images6.fanpop.com/image/photos/39700000/Slug-Girl-monster-girl-quest-39767790-500-500.png)
STATS:
ATK: 3
Her gastropod is very effective when she dosnt have her sword, as it can normally knock most people over.
DEF:2
she hasnt practiced alot of blocking or any defense. meaning she is quite normal when it comes to defense
SPD: 0
Melk is a slug, moving extremely slowly compared to human
TEC: 5
She has practiced with a sword for most of her life for personal defense.
STARTING PROFICIENCIES:
Physical Strength – 1000 OM
STARTING POWERS:
STARTING MOVES:
Rapier - 300 OM
A rapier Melk caries around for self defense, fast and reliable, its slimy due to how melk holds it, with her membrane, length of the blade is around 104 cm. due to her species, the sword is normally extremely slimy, especially with the way she holds it, with her membrane, although this slime is harmless compared to high slugs which have dissolving slime.
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Found out about this from Rin Tako
RE: Melk - Luci - 07-07-2018
Hello Melk, and welcome to the Omniverse! There are a few issues with your app I wanted to discuss before senior member takes a look at your app.
I see that you have only used 5 stat points, although your character is allocated 10 stats points.
It would also be helpfull if you added a length to your rapier.
Finally your move Gale Thrust is not descriptive enough. It seems to be a single fast strike, which doesn't normally require it's own Move. Please add a bit more description of the move.
You might also consider making Gale Thrust a Supermove, which is what it sounds like to me.
RE: Melk - Melk - 07-07-2018
(07-07-2018, 04:55 PM)Luci Wrote: Hello Melk, and welcome to the Omniverse! There are a few issues with your app I wanted to discuss before senior member takes a look at your app.
I see that you have only used 5 stat points, although your character is allocated 10 stats points.
It would also be helpfull if you added a length to your rapier.
Finally your move Gale Thrust is not descriptive enough. It seems to be a single fast strike, which doesn't normally require it's own Move. Please add a bit more description of the move.
You might also consider making Gale Thrust a Supermove, which is what it sounds like to me.
Thank you for the feedback, i have decided not to use gale thrust as it basically just another way she uses her rapier and my stats have been edited to fit 10 points.
RE: Melk - Civic - 07-08-2018
Hi Melk, everything looks good except you need to mention when in your character's history she was taken from her world to the Omniverse.
RE: Melk - Melk - 07-08-2018
(07-08-2018, 07:51 AM)Civic Wrote: Hi Melk, everything looks good except you need to mention when in your character's history she was taken from her world to the Omniverse.
Thank you, i have updated her history
RE: Melk - Civic - 07-08-2018
Everything looks good! Welcome to the Omniverse! We hope you have a great time here.
Please copy and paste the below into a new thread in the Rosters forum with your character’s name as the title:
Name: Melk
Spent OM: 1300
Consumed OM: 0
Proficiencies (1000): Physical Strength (1000)
Powers (0/8000):
Moves (300): Rapier (300)
Super Moves (0):
Transformations (0):
Assists (0):
Items:
Artefacts:
Bases:
Unlocks (0):
Base Stats:
ATK: 3
DEF: 2
SPD: 0
TEC: 5
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