Gamzee Makara Wrote:Super Atomic Double Juggalo Backbreaker (Tier 1 Super Attack) - Gamzee makes a lunge for his opponent from behind, (how he gets behind is dependent of the situation and written differently every time of course) wrapping his arms around the poor soul's waist. Before the target can blink, the clown turns his/her world upside down in a vicious suplex. As his enemy's head/neck crashes into the ground, Gamzee uses this momentum to follow through with one more wrestling throw, this time launching both himself and his unlucky foe into the air before crashing back to earth in a similar fashion as before. During this entire display, the juggalo begins to channel Rage Aspect energy and mix it internally with his innate Subjugglator powers. Upon impact of the second dive, the troll releases this energy all at once in a rainbow colored explosion, similar to that of a large mixed bundle of fireworks, centered around the fulcrum of impact. The explosion is roughly 10 meters in diameter. Cosmetically, the resulting smoke and aroma given off from this rage-splosion smells suspiciously like fruity soda. (600 OM Requires Physical Strength Proficiency and Area Attack Proficiency,)

Lightning Aura: I was thinking of having multiple uses for this. Gamzee stands still for four seconds (would three be unbalanced?) to generate his Rage Aspect Lightning, and when the lightning is crawling across his body, he could do three things: charge this energy into a lightning spear to be thrown in his hands, coat his juggling clubs with this energy, ooooorrrr overcharge the lightning to create an electrical explosion, centered around himself. All of the lightning is a deep, pulsating violet.

The spear of lightning is a strange projectile that Gamzee throws like a javelin. The spear itself is one meter long and appears as a solid spear of violet lightning. It erupts in a small shower of sparks upon contact with a foreign surface, excluding organic material(i.e. skin or fur) which it punctures as a regular spear would before also violently blowing up in another spark shower that doesn't extend beyond roughly 2/3 of a meter. The downside is of course that the AoE of the sparks is pretty small, and the sparks themselves don't actually do or hurt that much unless Gamzee can actually hit his target. Make sense?

As the electricity channels into his favorite weapons, the clubs become wrapped up lightning as if it were living barbed wire. The lightning dissipates on contact with any surface, so if he misses, then that's pretty much it for that club. If he manages to land a hit on his opponent with a club coiled with lightning, it is similar to being struck with an electric stun baton or taser. Gamzee can only charge his clubs once per fight, as continued use degrades the integrity and solidarity of his pins.

The Overcharged Lightning explosion is also rather contained, and is only about 3 meters in diameter, with Gamzee at the center. It is similar to an electrically caused combustion or explosion. While fairly devastating to any close range opponents, it also happens to damage Gamzee. Eh?

(900 OM for three different purposes, requires Ranged Proficiency, Debuff Proficiency(For the Stun Clubs), and Area Attack Proficiency)

Quote:These all look great to me (especially the soda-splosion lawl). The only thing I'd add would be how much damage the sparks from the javelin do (roughly, maybe in comparison to the initial javelin impact?) and how many foes it can affect. Also, how much the Overcharge hurts Gamz (again roughly; 'mildly', 'severely', etc).

Kakashi Hatake Wrote:How long are you thinking for a time limit on this? And does it do any damage by itself other than what is done by the person being tossed into walls and stuff? Can the enemy still use techniques of their own, or are they more or less stunned? Also, you'll be needing Telekinesis and likely also Debuff Proficiency as you're more or less incapacitating them. You wouldn't really (I don't think) need Ranged Proficiency since you're not really casting a projectile, but I think you have it purchased anyway so the point's kinda moot.

Depending on your answer to some of these questions, you may not need to make it a Super. If it lasts a while, damages a bunch and incapacitates though, it will need to be a super. You'd need the mentioned power and prof. either way, though.

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Sans Wrote:

Kakashi Hatake Wrote:How long are you thinking for a time limit on this? And does it do any damage by itself other than what is done by the person being tossed into walls and stuff? Can the enemy still use techniques of their own, or are they more or less stunned? Also, you'll be needing Telekinesis and likely also Debuff Proficiency as you're more or less incapacitating them. You wouldn't really (I don't think) need Ranged Proficiency since you're not really casting a projectile, but I think you have it purchased anyway so the point's kinda moot.

Depending on your answer to some of these questions, you may not need to make it a Super. If it lasts a while, damages a bunch and incapacitates though, it will need to be a super. You'd need the mentioned power and prof. either way, though.

Blue Mode: Tier 1 Super Attack Move (requires Remote Control Proficiency, requires Debuff Proficiency, requires Telekinesis) - 2000 OM

Pretty much Sans' trump card when it comes to combat. Blue Mode is a super move that comes into use whenever Sans believes it is needed. When he wants to use it, he raises one of his hands, palm facing his opponent, and keeps this position for around six seconds, concentrating on the target. Once the six seconds are up, the target suddenly turns a dark shade of blue, and is now able to be tossed around like a ragdoll by Sans, and are more or less at the mercy to Sans. This lasts a prime total of one minute, though Sans can end it before the one minute is up, depending on whether or not he is running out of energy.

The way it functions is that, in those six seconds, Sans is attempting to access the opponent's "soul" and change its color, which represents the "souls" function. Here, Blue Mode subjects the "soul" to gravity based on Sans whim alone, allowing him to basically throw his target around in whatever direction he finds fitting using just his outstretched hand, doing substantial damage in the process.

There are downsides to "Blue Mode," however. For starters, it requires a huge amount of energy and concentration from Sans, preventing him from using it often. Secondly, opponents with a higher TEC than him are able to somewhat resist the effects of Blue Mode, reducing the amount of damage they will most likely receive. Thirdly, the only way he can damage his opponent in Blue Mode is to toss them around, as the move itself doesn't do any damage. Finally, like all of his moves, he cannot use Blue Mode in conjunction with all of his other moves.

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Connor Hound Wrote:Magically deep pockets: Fodder (?)

The two inner pockets of Connor's trench coat (one on each side), are four inches wide and seem to have a depth of 5 inches. He can store anything in the pockets without feeling the weight of the items as long as the item can fit in the entrance

HandPad: Explaination of his Dataverse device and communicator

A cell phone like device that is held within the second layer of the users skin. By touching their thumb and middle finger the user turns on a holoscreen that is also the devices GUI. Connor programmed a second function which he activates by touching his pointer finger and thumb together, this turns him invisible.

Kakashi Hatake Wrote:

Connor Hound Wrote:Magically deep pockets: Fodder (?)

The two inner pockets of Connor's trench coat (one on each side), are four inches wide and seem to have a depth of 5 inches. He can store anything in the pockets without feeling the weight of the items as long as the item can fit in the entrance

HandPad: Explaination of his Dataverse device and communicator

A cell phone like device that is held within the second layer of the users skin. By touching their thumb and middle finger the user turns on a holoscreen that is also the devices GUI. Connor programmed a second function which he activates by touching his pointer finger and thumb together, this turns him invisible.

Pockets: Looks fine, just note that if you were to die holding an artefact it would still drop and be steal-able.

HandPad: Looks good. You'd need to buy the Stealth ability to turn invisible, though. Once you do, feel free to RP it activating this way.

Quote:This is looking better. As it's written here, I take back my comment about Debuff; you wouldn't need it if this is going to be a Super Move used for damage that doesn't linger. However, I'd have to say (after discussing with a few Angels) that a minute is too long of a duration. A minute is a very long time in combat and it could cause some issues with other players whaling on the target while they're under the influence of the ability. A good timeframe would be around 10 seconds, which I know is a good deal less than what you're probably aiming for. Bear in mind though that you'll be doing standard super move-level damage (a lot) during that time.

Like Minato said, the cost of the move is only 600 OM rather than 2000, though it looks like 2000 encompasses the cost of the move and all of the powers and proficiencies along with it. Just make sure that when you buy everything it's spelled out plainly and individually in your log and roster rather than lumped together. Oh, and since it's a Super you wouldn't need the bit about resisting with a high TEC stat, it'd always work unless blocked by another Super.

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Quick question, would I need to list all of the Powers and Proficiencies needed next to the move once I buy it and have all of them?

Quote:Blue Mode: Tier 1 Super Attack Move (requires Remote Control Proficiency, requires Telekinesis) - 600 OM

Pretty much Sans' trump card when it comes to combat. Blue Mode is a super move that comes into use whenever Sans believes it is needed. When he wants to use it, he raises one of his hands, palm facing his opponent, and keeps this position for around six seconds, concentrating on the target. Once the six seconds are up, the target suddenly turns a dark shade of blue, and is now able to be tossed around like a ragdoll by Sans, and are more or less at the mercy to Sans. This lasts a prime total of 15 seconds, though Sans can end it before the one minute is up, depending on whether or not he is running out of energy.

The way it functions is that, in those six seconds, Sans is attempting to access the opponent's "soul" and change its color, which represents the "souls" function. Here, Blue Mode subjects the "soul" to gravity based on Sans whim alone, allowing him to basically throw his target around in whatever direction he finds fitting using just his outstretched hand, doing substantial damage in the process.

There are downsides to "Blue Mode," however. For starters, it requires a huge amount of energy and concentration from Sans, preventing him from using it often. Secondly, the only way he can damage his opponent in Blue Mode is to toss them around, as the move itself doesn't do any damage. Finally, like all of his moves, he cannot use Blue Mode in conjunction with all of his other moves.

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Quick question, would I need to list all of the Powers and Proficiencies needed next to the move once I buy it and have all of them?

Luger Wrote:OWL drone- A advanced hovering attack drone used exclusively by Luger to give her all kinds of tactical abilities in the field. It attaches itself onto Luger's suit until she gives it an order. When damaged, the OWL automatically returns and repairs itself until it receives an order again.

Attack mode- Allows Luger to command the Owl drone to attack a enemy either from a distance or close by.

Zipline mode- - Allows Luger to access a zipline to various areas if she needs to get across areas fast.

Stun mode-- The OWL drone can stun a enemy from a distance of 10 feet or more.

Shield mode- The Owl drone is commanded by Luger to protect her with a rectangular like shield,

Would i need to buy moves for the OWL drone's different modes?

Quote:Improving this move by adding an ability to damage people overtime with the flames, and not just get heat stroke or something XD