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Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 09-29-2015
Character name: Shadow Erebos
Character source: Original
Character history: Shadow was born in the dark forest of his home realm Almina. For 6 years he has lived there with his mother, father, and late younger sister. Then, one day, a group of poachers, hellbent on capturing rare species, found his secluded home. Shadow and Elise, his sister, were playing out in the forest before the attack. However, when they heard the roars of the rest of the family, they knew that something was wrong. They rushed back as quickly as they could, but they ran into one of the poachers on the way. Said poacher picked up his gun, aimed for Elise, and shot. The shot wasn't meant to kill, only injure enough for capture, but due to Shadow frantically tacking the man in an attempt to save Elise.... the bullet hit her right between the eyes...... Shadow ran away that day, never returning. This event has been the cause of many issues later in his life. Shadow has recently disappeared from Almina, no one is sure where he went but they hope for his safe return. He is now in the Omniverse.
Physical Description: Shadow stands at 7'0. He's thin, but he does have muscle. Due to his build, Shadow's quick and light on his feet, but can hit rather hard. He's an albino, having pale skin, white hair and a red eye. His other eye is silver. Shadow has multiple scars on his face and body, 4 on his right eye, 1 on his left, many on his wings and 5 on his tail. Due to his draconian heritage, Shadow appears to be a dragon-human hybrid. He wears a white overcoat with blue trim, a black turtleneck sweater, grey jeans, and has bandages wrapped around his dragon-like feet. He has a large scythe strapped to his back, which he uses in combat, said scythe is named Mortem Orbisque.
Stats:
ATK:3
DEF:2
SPD:3
TEC:2
Starting Proficiencies: Physical Strength (1000),
Starting Powers: Super Speed (1000) ,Basic Super Jumping (300), Master Acrobat (400)
Starting Moves: Mortem Orbisque ((600)) : (Requires Physical Strength Proficiency) - A large, jagged bladed scythe that can be used in quick combo attacks and heavy single blows. The blade is around 4 ft long while the shaft is almost as tall as Shadow is. | Quick Mode : (Requires Physical Strength Proficiency) The time between blows is lessened, but does less damage than normal heavy blows
Dark Claw Slash ((300)) : (Requires Physical Strength Proficiency) - Shadow coats his 1/2 inch claws in a weak, dark energy that strengthens them. Can be used in rapid succession.
Normal Claw Slash ((300)) : (Requires Physical Strength Proficiency) - Similar to Dark Claw slash, but without the dark energy, therefore, doing less damage
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Re: Shadow Erebos - Mickey Mouse - 09-29-2015
Hey! Welcome to the Omniverse. A few quick questions!
Can you edit your history just a bit to indicate when Shadow was abducted into the Omniverse by Omni? I assume it's sometime after his sister died, but we like to know with some degree of specificity.
Mortem Orbisque: I need to know exactly how long the scythe is and, preferably, how long the blade is as well. I feel like there's something else but I can't think of it at the moment so just tell me those and I'll take another look at it.
Dark Claw Slash: Is this the only way he can use his claws to attack? Because if you want him to be able to attack with his claws when they aren't coated in dark energy you're going to need a move for them as well. Otherwise, this looks pretty good.
Thank you so much for making these edits and I hope you enjoy the Omniverse!
(Also, turtlenecks -- love it)
Re: Shadow Erebos - Minato Namikaze - 09-30-2015
Just going to step in and assist mickey with that Extra thing he was thinking of;
The quick combo's and Slower, heavy, singular blows would be stronger correct? That would then count as another mode. Faster combo's = slightly less power than a Slower yet stronger blow.
It's akin to a rate of fire of a gun, if it has multiple rates of fire that is.
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 09-30-2015
Okay! That works! I'll get working on it right away!
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 09-30-2015
Done!
Re: Shadow Erebos - The Rogue - 09-30-2015
It would be a variable move then right?
Re: Shadow Erebos - Minato Namikaze - 09-30-2015
Oh, you don't need to list each mode as a separate move, I just meant that it'd be a variable move and would cost 600
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 09-30-2015
Fixed!
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 10-06-2015
Bump
Re: Shadow Erebos - Minato Namikaze - 10-06-2015
Could you space out each move please? it's kind of difficult to read as it is.
eg.
Move Name (requirements) (Cost) - Description of move
Move Name (requirements) (Cost) - Description of move
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 10-07-2015
Fixed
Re: Shadow Erebos - Minato Namikaze - 10-07-2015
If you want your claws to be a weapon, they must be purchased as a move, otherwise the only time they will be used to effective standards would be during your Dark Claw slash.
Dark Claw Slash - What does coating his Claws in dark energy actually do? If I may suggest turning this into a ranged move? instead of being a melee attack, he would coat his claws in Dark Energy and when he swings his arm, the Dark energy fires off towards an opponent? Like something similar to Inuyasha's Blades of Blood.
Of course, you can keep the Dark Claw Slash as is
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 10-07-2015
Fixed! Oh and the dark energy just makes the attack stronger
Re: Shadow Erebos - Minato Namikaze - 10-08-2015
No, what I meant about the claws was something like this;
Claws (Physical Strength) (300): [Description of Claws. Etc. how long they are, what colour they are]
Edit: Wait, I assumed that Normal Claw Slash was what you put in when I mentioned the claw thing. I'm probably wrong, but am now just checking.
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 10-08-2015
Fixed
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 10-10-2015
Bump
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 10-11-2015
Bump
Re: Shadow Erebos - Minato Namikaze - 10-14-2015
Sorry for the massive delay ;~; Your history does have a point at which your character does disappear from his own world, but you need to pretty much say that he cam to the Omniverse.
Re: Shadow Erebos - Shadow Erebos - 10-14-2015
Fixed
Re: Shadow Erebos - Minato Namikaze - 10-14-2015
Approved, I'll have your roster and stuff done shortly